雅思寫作環(huán)境類滿分范文解析

雅思寫作題材范圍廣泛，包括科技類，媒體類，社會類等。今天我們主要來學習一下環(huán)境類高分范文是如何寫作的。話不多說，就跟著新通教育的老師來了解雅思寫作環(huán)境類滿分范文解析吧。首先我們簡單介紹一下環(huán)境類的話題：
環(huán)境類的雅思寫作話題是所有話題類型中很熱門的一個話題，每年必考，也是雅思作文必練題型，一般包括，新舊能源，個人能否解決環(huán)境問題，政府和大公司誰該為環(huán)境問題負責等。
 最常見的話題類型有三種：
1. 環(huán)境問題原因，解決方案
2. 動物保護
3. 國際社會，政府和私人對于環(huán)境問題的責任
要評價一篇文章的優(yōu)劣勢，首先還是讓我們熟悉一下Writing Task 2即大作文的評分標準。
Task response (TR)
Whether all parts of the task are addressed
Whether a viewpoint is clearly expressed, developed and supported.
Cohesion and coherence (CC)
Whether the response has a suitable layout and logical ordering of points
(文章是否條理清晰，行文有邏輯)
Correct and appropriate use of connectives (是否正確使用銜接詞)
Lexical resources (LR)
Range and accuracy of vocabulary (詞匯豐富度和準確度)
The correct form and spelling of the words (詞匯形式和拼寫正確)
Grammatical range and accuracy (GRA)
The range and accuracy of tenses and sentence structure (時態(tài)和句式的豐富度和準確度)
接下來，我們還是以一篇滿分范文為例，看看具體怎么好在哪里，為什么會拿到了滿分，我們能學到哪些知識，技巧。
 題目：
Trying to save endangered animals species from extinction is a waste of valuable recourses. Do you agree or disagree?Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
 范文：
The issue of whether we should attempt to save endangered species from extinction or not is certainly a contentious one. Despite the arguments of some people that such animals serve no useful purpose and should be allowed to die out just as many others (including the dinosaurs) have in the past, it is my personal belief that they should in fact be preserved. Two of the principal reasons for this are as follows.
Firstly, it is vital that we appreciate the importance of endangered species in maintaining the balance of nature. Ecosystems are delicate arrangements where plants and animals all depend on each other for survival. The disappearance or introduction of any animal species disrupts the balance and negatively impacts upon other plants and animals by breaking the food chain and altering the habitat in which they live. Such imbalances frequently return to haunt us in unexpected ways. Just as rabbits that were introduced to Australia soon after European settlement now compete with native species for food and destroy farmers’ crops, the extinction of a predator can cause plagues by allowing its prey to multiply unchecked. Therefore, since ecological change constitutes a potential risk to us and our environment, it is clearly in our own interests to protect endangered species.
Yet, perhaps the strongest argument in favor of preserving endangered species is that all life has intrinsic values; even if endangered species are not useful to us in any practical way they should be preserved nevertheless. Further, given that we humans are responsible for destroying the natural habitat of many endangered animals, we should make every possible effort to save them.
In conclusion, I once again restate my view that saving endangered species is worthwhile. Not only do they help to maintain the balance of nature, but they also have value in and of themselves.
(305 words)
Task response(TR)
首先我們先從TR方面分析一下
Whether all parts of the task are addressed
(是否解決任務的所有部分)
經(jīng)過審題我們發(fā)現(xiàn)這是一個個人觀點類的作文，即What are your opinions on this? 給出你自己的觀點，其要求是Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience，根據(jù)自己的知識或經(jīng)驗給出相關的例子。其中如果用自己的知識論證那就是道理論證，如果根據(jù)自己的經(jīng)驗來論證那就涉及到了舉例論證。
文章首段第一句就拋出了一個問題，是否應該拯救瀕危動物，并且讓步指出了別人的觀點，之后給出自己的觀點，即it is my personal belief that they should in fact be preserved.個人觀點是應該保護瀕危動物的，并且埋下伏筆兩個原因如下。接下來的兩個主體段給出了作者自己的論點以及論據(jù)，最后總結段簡短有力。 這篇文章還是完成了題目要求的所有內(nèi)容的。
Whether a viewpoint is clearly expressed, developed and supported
其次我們在看看作者表達的觀點是否清晰，有說服力
文章的第一個論點Firstly, it is vital that we appreciate the importance of endangered species in maintaining the balance of nature. 首先,至關重要的是,我們能夠認識到瀕危物種在維護大自然的平衡的重要性。接下來作者先用到了道理論證，有力的說明了生態(tài)系統(tǒng)是脆弱的，很容易被破壞的， 以及生態(tài)系統(tǒng)不平衡之后會產(chǎn)生的嚴重后果。隨后作者又運用了舉例論證，以澳大利亞引進歐洲兔子為例，兔子引進之后沒有天敵，導致了生態(tài)平衡的破壞。所以我 們的目標就是保護瀕臨動物以及生態(tài)系統(tǒng)。
Yet, perhaps the strongest argument in favor of preserving endangered species is that all life has intrinsic values文章的第二個論點：然而,也許最有力的論據(jù)支持保護瀕危物種是所有生命內(nèi)在的價值觀。接下來作者用了一個讓步的寫法，盡管瀕危動物對我們來說 并沒有實際的用處，但是人類還是有責任來保護我們破壞的自熱環(huán)境以及瀕危動物。
作者運用了舉例論證和道理相結合還有讓步的手法，使文章有理有據(jù)，很有說服力。
那下面我們一起看一下文章在連貫和銜接方面有什么值得借鑒的吧。

Cohesion and coherence (CC)首先講一下寫作中使用連接詞有什么作用：
1. 使得文章框架明晰，邏輯結構合理。
2. 起到承上啟下，語篇連貫自然的作用。
3. 使得文章層次分明，結構嚴謹。
文章中句與句直接的銜接詞有：despite(盡管 表讓步)，therefore(因此 表結果)，even if(即使 表讓步)，further(此外 表進一步說明)，not only…but also(不僅…而且 表示強調)等等。這些單詞在文章段落中表示著一定的邏輯關系，這些詞的實用會使段落直接更加的順暢自然。
段與段之間的連接詞有Two of the principal reasons for this are as follows. Firstly, it is vital that we appreciate the …第一句話是首段的結尾句，兩個原因如下，而第二句是主體段的開頭第一個原因是…很好的做到了承上啟下的作用。In conclusion總之，也是段與段之間的一個連接詞組，讓讀者清晰明白到這是總結段。

Lexical resources (LR)這篇文章在詞匯方面也有很多可圈可點之處：
Contentious 有爭議的
Principal reasons 首要的原因
Die out 滅絕
Preserved 被保護
Ecosystems 生態(tài)系統(tǒng)
delicate 脆弱的
disrupts 使紊亂
imbalances 不平衡
haunt us 困擾著我們
in unexpected ways 出乎意料的方式
extinction of a predator 捕食者滅絕
plagues 瘟疫
multiply unchecked 不加抑制的繁殖
ecological change 生態(tài)變化
constitutes 構成
a potential risk 潛在的風險
endangered species 瀕危物種
strongest argument 最有力的論證
in favor of 支持
preserving endangered species 保護瀕危物種
intrinsic values 內(nèi)在價值
natural habitat 自然棲息地
make every possible effort to 盡一切可能的努力
restate my view 重申我的觀點
worthwhile 值得做的
maintain the balance of 保持…的平衡
這些都是文章中運用的非常棒的單詞，值得我們背下來并且運用到自己的寫作中。
Grammatical range and accuracy (GRA)
語法的正確復雜，句式的多樣也是評分標準的一個很重要的方面。文章的開頭句The issue of whether we should attempt to save endangered species from extinction or not is certainly a contentious one.就用到了一個主語從句，充分顯示了作者扎實的語法功底。it is my personal belief that…涉及到了強調句式，第二段的開頭it is vital that we appreciate…為了避免頭重腳輕用到了形式主語。通過對這篇滿分環(huán)境類范文的分析，我們可以知道，想要寫好一篇分數(shù)很高的文章應該做到以下幾點：
1，審清題目，明白題目的要求，完成題目所給任務
2，論點要有理有據(jù)，可以使用道理論證和舉例論證相結合
3，多使用恰當?shù)倪B接詞，是文章更加流暢自然
4，注意詞匯的使用，盡量高級有深度
5，語法要避免單一以及大量簡單句，盡量使句式的多樣化
以上就是雅思寫作環(huán)境類滿分范文解析的詳細內(nèi)容，考生在平時還是要多加練習，不斷改進。希望考生取得滿意的雅思成績，更多雅思備考經(jīng)驗我們將會陸續(xù)為大家更新。