實例分析雅思寫作“見官死”開頭

對于多數(shù)同學而言，雅思寫作還是比較難的，太多的烤鴨在動筆之初就走在了翻盤的路上。開頭段，開頭句基本就能讓寫作考官對你的寫作有了一個預期，你的分數(shù)就落入了某個區(qū)間。看看一些及其容易被考官內(nèi)心怒罵的開頭吧。

“見官死”開頭之一：磨磨唧唧 羅哩羅嗦

典型失敗案例： Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?

This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……

修改方案：開門見山 直奔主題

In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。

Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information? (雅思真題)

Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.

Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection

Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!

“見官死”開頭之二：中式英文人見人暈

典型失敗案例：Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

Topic 2- The population problem

The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?

I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……  

Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person 

Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”. 

“見官死”開頭之三：觀點模糊態(tài)度曖昧 

典型失敗案例： Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married? 

I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……

“見官死”開頭之四：偏離主題無軌電車 

典型失敗案例：Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思真題)  

I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

“見官死”開頭之五：語法錯誤慘不忍睹

典型失敗案例：Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished? (雅思真題) 

About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.

“見官死”開頭之六：過分簡單沒有重點 

典型失敗案例：Topic-The importance of environmental protection 

This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it! 

“見官死”開頭之七：用詞不當 表達不準  

典型失敗案例：Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family. 

“見官死”開頭之八：意思重復原地踏步  

典型失敗案例：Topic-Your opinion on DINK families  

My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.  

“見官死”開頭之九：中國俗語胡亂翻譯  

典型失敗案例：Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?  

I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……  

正確說法：Happiness lies in having many children  

Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance? 

We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……  

Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?

Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……  

Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”. 

“見官死”開頭之十： 觀點武斷 態(tài)度強硬 

典型失敗案例：Topic1-The importance of confidence

In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed.

Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem  

I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.

好了，說了這么多有沒有需要改進的地方呢，希望大家在今后的時間里多多注意以上的問題，祝大家考試順利！

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