雅思大作文的語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)是大家突破雅思的重點(diǎn)難點(diǎn)。什么樣的文字是雅思考官青睞的,什么樣的句型是考官常用的。大家一定要把握,模仿,努力地寫(xiě)出考官的韻味。劍橋系列后面的黑框部分就有雅思的考官的作文,默認(rèn)為雅思最高水準(zhǔn),這是最好的學(xué)習(xí)素材,就像學(xué)書(shū)法必須先臨摹。今天一起分析一下雅思最高水平的文字的特點(diǎn)。大家要積極模仿。所采取的資料全部是來(lái)自劍橋9-11的范文。
1 平行結(jié)構(gòu)多
Although I do not support an outright ban on such activities, I do feel that government should restrict or regulate these pursuits.
這句話(huà)考官用兩個(gè)動(dòng)詞調(diào)節(jié)語(yǔ)氣,詞匯準(zhǔn)確,而且修辭上頭韻的效果,大家多收集意思相近的動(dòng)詞,動(dòng)詞的排列是很體現(xiàn)語(yǔ)言水平的。
Advocates of this believe that today’s sedentary lifestyle and stressful working conditions mean that physical activity is no longer part of either our work or our leisure time
形容詞+名詞的排列,意思上表達(dá)全面,語(yǔ)感上佳。
The variety of sports that could be offered would cater for all ages, levels of fitness and interests
名詞的排列特別注意下意思的遞進(jìn)。邏輯全面性的體現(xiàn)。
2 圍繞中心詞寫(xiě)出長(zhǎng)修飾
In fact it would be fair to maintain that if extreme sports were banned, then why not ban any activity which could be interpreted as harmful such as smoking, drinking or even eating junk food?
大家一定要培養(yǎng)賓語(yǔ)的擴(kuò)展能力,寫(xiě)出中心名詞后,用定語(yǔ)從句進(jìn)行修飾。這是英漢之間語(yǔ)言的大區(qū)別。英語(yǔ)是先給中心詞,后面加上修飾。中文習(xí)慣定語(yǔ)放在名詞的前面。文中中心詞是activity,后面是拓展部分。
3 謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞多樣化處理
Rather than banning these sports, governments should ensure that companies who provide facilities for dangerous sports meet the required legal safety standards.
多個(gè)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞處理有兩種方式,一個(gè)是連接詞銜接,動(dòng)詞原形排列,一個(gè)非謂語(yǔ)表達(dá)(to do/doing/done)體現(xiàn)多樣性。但是,大家一定要注意非謂語(yǔ)的排列順序會(huì)有邏輯效果,所以要格外嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)。
we would be more likely to make exercise a regular part of our lives, rather than just collapsing in front of the screen every evening.
非謂語(yǔ)表達(dá)強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)果的邏輯。
4 插入語(yǔ)多見(jiàn)
If, for example, an individual decided to go parachute jumping, then the authorities should insist that he or she undergo sufficient training and supervision and, if necessary, obtain the legally required license
插入語(yǔ)是有難度的手藝,需要有積累,位置擺的要有講究。既要考慮語(yǔ)法,又要兼顧意思。需要長(zhǎng)期練習(xí)。
5 狀語(yǔ)處理
介詞是英語(yǔ)的靈魂,介詞引導(dǎo)狀語(yǔ)是考官的慣用手段。介詞的搭配和位置是英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作的重點(diǎn)難點(diǎn),一個(gè)人對(duì)于介詞的駕馭直接體現(xiàn)語(yǔ)言水平。狀語(yǔ)可以豐富句意,意思上更加全面。這是語(yǔ)言嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)性,邏輯性的直接體現(xiàn)。主要是時(shí)間,地點(diǎn),方式,條件,目的等等。
One problem of modern societies is the declining level of health in general population, with conflicting views on how to tackle this worrying trend.(伴隨狀語(yǔ))
If there were easy-to
reach local sports centers, we would be more likely to make exercise a regular part of our lives, rather than just collapsing in front of the screen every evening.(地點(diǎn)狀語(yǔ))
This has the added benefit the parents and children often use them together just for fun which develops a positive attitude to exercise at an early age.(at時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)細(xì)節(jié)展示)
As well as physical activity, high tax penalties could be imposed on high-fat food products, tobacco and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these contributes to poor health.(as引導(dǎo)原因狀語(yǔ))
5概念到具體的過(guò)程
The variety of spors that could be offered would cater for all ages, levels of fitness and interests: those with painful memories of PE at school might be happier in the swimming pool than on the football pitch.
細(xì)節(jié)化的展示是雅思作文的特點(diǎn)。從抽象到具體,從概括到細(xì)節(jié)。大家要學(xué)會(huì)這種演繹法的思路。
Physical activity could be encouraged relatively cheaply, for example by installing exercise equipment in parks, as my local counsel has done.
6 不寫(xiě)簡(jiǎn)單句
考官的范文中,簡(jiǎn)單句出現(xiàn)的次數(shù)屈指可數(shù),非常罕見(jiàn)。幾乎一篇只有一兩句。
Interest in sports is not universal and additional facilities my simply attract the already fit, not those who most need them.
這句話(huà),本來(lái)是兩個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句,但是考官用連詞搭配,變成復(fù)合句。所以,當(dāng)大家簡(jiǎn)單句太多時(shí),一定注意下連接詞把這些簡(jiǎn)單句整合起來(lái)。但是,一定要注意邏輯關(guān)系,表達(dá)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)性。
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